One of my friends in the V I class is Heflin Riandari who has a long journey to campus. Her journey to the University of Prof.DR. HAMKA, also known as UHAMKA , is begun at 6 o’clock. She rides motorcycle from her house which it is located in North Bekasi, but she parks her motorcycle in Kranji Station. Then she has to cross railway in Kranji Station. After that she continues her journey by bus P9B to our beloved campus which it is located in East Jakarta. Actually her house is in North Bekasi, but she takes a bus P9B East. For arrive to the in front of campus, she still has to take a transportation. I think Her journey to the campus is long and unique, because her route is from North to West and end in East. However, I am proud with her. Even though her journey is long, she is never absent to came to the class. For me she is a wonder girl who can pass the challenge during goes to the campus.
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Fiuuuuh, the journey seems so tiring, ya:-). Well done girl, u clearly describe and develop the topic sentence well as it's easily read. However, u have to recall the topic sentence. TS has 2 components, topic and CI. Do you think u already marked correctly the TS?
BalasHapusMind ur punctuation, conjunction, and the rules of using each type of sentence. Be more awfully ware when u start writing the 1st sentence. All in all, nice 2 read this. Write better next time.